Not a love poem.

something i came up with a couple days ago, it's not really done. Any thoughts?

Crazy me
Crazy you
Time shutters on these crazy blues
Breathin on these days
Is like feedin the fire
Remembering the times
When the madness subdued
Drinks are makin me hazy
But the words are comin out sober
An open mind ready to cease
Tryin to sift through the lies and disease
I’m starin down at my feet
Chaos chasin me, droppin the beats
Everything happens for a reason
But not for me
Glazin up and down these streets
Blood running cold
But between the lines
You and I know
Time never turns back
And even then
I wouldn’t fix a thing
Surrounding, trying to bring us down
Tryin to blend us in
With their mental threats
I might be a little angry
Throwing my fists up
And crossin the lines just like the saints
These aren’t just thoughts
They’re flesh and bone
I won’t confuse myself with your affliction
For all I know, I’m still untamed
And forgettin all the memories
Of bottomless pain
And these thoughts racin, racin through my veins
Line ‘em up in army rows, left and right
Askin questions we’ll never know

I liked it

What will this be? It sounds like it would make an interesting Hip hop song. It has that rhythm.

thanxx i don't know, my writings always end up being more like a song. I guess i like writing lyrics more than poems.