The darkest hour

In this poem, I don't think the 'when i'm asleep' part of each verse really fits to the flow, if anything, it breaks it up. It makes the poem a bit scratched up, and lost, feeling something is missing, an 'emptyness' - which is kind of the point of the words, so i guess it does fit.

The darkest hour
In time of need
talking to
myself asleep

I wish this moment
passes soon
it only ends
when I'm asleep

this pain inside
i cannot keep
it goes away
when i'm asleep

i'll dream those nights
away in bed
away from here
when i'm asleep

I do not
want to feel this week
but it only ends
when i'm asleep

RK, please keep these poems in some kind of journal (i.e. don't discard them). They are like that book I mentioned before about musings of a young doctor. You'll want these for later, trust me.

thanks indi, i've written many random poems on paper, but i always seem to loose them, and throw them away, the only one's i've kept are on this site, i think i will get a free hosting website, and copy/paste and date them on it.

thanks for the idea, i will. im the future, i will look at the poems in a different light.

i kind of wish whaywardj was still around too, he did mention or start me up with some kind of website to post, but i never did follow through.

thanks again!

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Originally Posted by RSK [Dear Guest/Member you have to reply to see the link.click here to register]

i kind of wish whaywardj was still around too, he did mention or start me up with some kind of website to post, but i never did follow through.

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Check your PM, RK.

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Originally Posted by RSK [Dear Guest/Member you have to reply to see the link.click here to register]

thanks indi, i've written many random poems on paper, but i always seem to loose them, and throw them away, the only one's i've kept are on this site, i think i will get a free hosting website, and copy/paste and date them on it.

thanks for the idea, i will. im the future, i will look at the poems in a different light.

i kind of wish whaywardj was still around too, he did mention or start me up with some kind of website to post, but i never did follow through.

thanks again!

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It's good to post poems in a forum but it's really a nice idea to create a personal website or a blog and publish your poems there. Since when this is written in a personal diary, only you can read them; but when you publish on internet, it mihgt reach the targeted audience.