A Cavalier

A CAVALIER :horror:


I woke up early in the morning
Seeing the beauty of the sun without denying
I saw the new beginning of life
The beginning of yours and mine

I swim deep down the river
I thought it has no surrender
But as I reached the bottom of it
I felt useless and dammit

Like “love” deep down in our hearts
It starts running like carts
It begins with letter “L”
And yet a letter cannot be felt

It’s merely true that everything fades
And so time does dies like waves
This feeling is not permanent
For this is only a settlement

Soon the sun sets in the west
Never forget how we enjoy at least
For everything was the greatest moment
That we could not even paint

Dammit this life of mine
Indeed, I learned and it’s fine
And so I say goodbye
To you my one and only life

The leaves in my trees decayed
Like the love you gave
Stones in my yards cracked
Like the love you unpacked

I wish only good luck and God Bless
For the Almighty God is there for best
Now you’re free from me
Go and do what you see

I’m no longer there to give you a hand
For my hands are filled with black sand
Though it hurts me of what happened
But I can’t avoid being hurt


This poem of mine leaves nothing
But love, respect, good luck and sorry
I had sinned to this greatest princess
For I never shown a cavalier confess

I felt so unhappy for destiny lied
I felt so sorry for everything fade
But I never turned back from this
It’s only that I have to forget this mess

My fingers keep crossing
Despite of my life keep looping
My heart keep wandering
How these things will keep working

The eyes of love they said
It was said untrue but I proved
I may be blind for the times
But I have seen how love sours like lime

My presence seemed to be untrue
For my princess did show flu
Flu because of hatred to me
Because she wants the prince and not me

Huh, I’m only a cavalier
A soldier for fighting not for love
Now, I am a cowboy of Sahara
Sahara a place of despair and karma

Yet, I was so happy
Because I served this princes
A princess that should be adored
For she was the greatest dream

Rudeness makes no sense
It’s nothing because I have fence
Hurts and worries neither penetrate
Because I have nothing but faith

Now, this has finally come to an end
All the hurts and worries I will miss
The time will soon help me heal wounds
The wounds that will mark until the day I die

Plz....give Your Comments...i'm Really Broken Hearted This Time.....and I'm Writing My Feelings Through This Poem.....

dude i liked it but it was a little to long and less dark.

what do you mean less dark>>>????
what should i do with my poem? revise it?

you see....i just lost my gf 3 weeks ago...so i'm writing this poem to express everything.....it's not my best though...but i'm so happy coz instead of suicide i put my attentions to this poem....it's kinda weird but it's what i feel right now...i can't help...myself... coz...i keep on crying.....i don't want to loose her.....but it's what she wants.....so i let her go....i'm the one in "dumped topic" my topic there was suicide attempt...i really thank you all for replying...hope to hear some advices from you....or reactions...all are welcome...

Your poem was very good. The only problem I see with it is that sometimes you seem to go off a little bit. Like as you get towards the end, in one stanza, I thought you were going to end it there. But instead you went on for a few more stanzas. Other than that I thought it was good. Very expressive of your feelings, it shows a lot of emotion. I'm sorry for whatever happend to you and your girlfriend.


Best of luck! ;)

Jamie

It was really very painful when i knew that she went to the other guy....and I had no choice....Suppose to be the poem should end at an earlier stanza but then,.....I think of another things...and i wrote what i'm feeling during those times.......I'm not a pro poet.....

I'm really sorry to hear that. But you'll feel better in time. It may take awhile but the pain does go away.
Poems really are a good way to vent your feelings about things. It always helps me to just write when I feel down about something or something has me upset. When my boyfriend broke up with me I wrote many poems lol. You don't have to be a professional at them. It's just a way to let your feelings out. So keep that in mind.