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I never thought I’d meet the one
I never thought I could ever trust
I always said love stabs u in the back
I never expected for u to change that
u are my life, u are my love
u are the one who never let's me give up why do u love me so? why do u care?
why do u console me,
whenever I am scared?
I don't understand this feeling
this swell with in my soul, yearning for u
but u don't ever seem to be there
how can u be the light of my life?
but also the darkness of all of my pain?
u hurt me and u don't realize
u make me sick and I just don't know why then again I love u, but why?

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Too hard to read. Pink font sucks.

if it's in big pink font, it's bad.

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Originally Posted by shh!

Too hard to read. Pink font sucks.

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Would that it did.

No offense, but... LOL

It sounds like you've got a lot to say there in your poem. I'd definitely rate the content as good, sounds like it's from the heart. However, try to work a little more on the flow of the poem. Poems should FLOW smoothly. Almost like they have a rythm or a beat to em'. Fix those problems and then repost it... Preferably not in pink.
EXAMPLE:
u are my life, u are my love (good)
u are the one who never let's me give up why do u love me so? why do u care? (f'ing long)

HAHAHA It's almost like two complete sentences. Not only that, but if they're supposed to be said together, they're completely unrelated. try something like : u are the only one i think of. Or something like that. Of course, I ain't no writer so what the hell do I know?