Poem for my ex girlfriend?

My girlfriend and I broke up last week. Its complicated. None of us cheated, but it was other reasons though why she wanted to end it. But i want to share a relationship with her again. We were together for a year and a half. We were going strong, then all of a sudden, we had an argument on the phone, and she said she had enough! I want to try and win her heart back. Everything she said about leaving me didn't make sense, like, "Our love has passed" or "I loved you, but it isn't enough anymore". This is the second time we broke up (the first was last year in september, but after couple days she came back to me. she initiated both breakups. Its kinda not fair, because part of the reason was about communicating with each other. I didn't know when she was hurting or alone or whatever because she would never tell me, and then one argument had her explode with all the emotions she kept within that was building up. Anyway, I wrote a poem right now, will this be okay to give to her, in person? Ima write it handwritten, and I might see her this week, I was hoping to give this to her:

~Irresistible Desires~
As the saying goes, there are plenty of fish in the sea.
But out of them all, only one, caught my eye with glee.
It is you, I cannot replace.
It is you, that I want to embrace.
I desire to share my life with you,
I can't help not think our love was true.
Yes, we've come across that treacherous road,
that broke us apart and had us implode.
It shattered our love, it pushed us away.
Its something I regret,a price I've had to pay.
But our love was true, was it not?
I guess our frustration, had us forgot?
I said before, that I was commited to you.
I'd never thought, one day we'd be through.
I am solemnly sorry for the hurt you felt,
that suddenly made our love for each other melt.
I see you want to focus on your career,
but am I really holding you back, if I am close and near?
You were a huge part of my world, my life,
someone who'd I thought one day be my wife.
Our love was real, it wasn't fake.
Seeing us apart, just makes my heart ache.
Our love was true, it wasn't a lie.
I am commited to you, I don't want to say goodbye.
I desire a future with you, the one I love.
I mean all the things that I mentioned above.
I will give you time, I will give you space,
Lets take it slow, a steady pace.
When you're ready, I want one more chance,
to share with you our former romance.
I love you with all my heart.
Hopefully together we'll have a new beginning, a new start.

She just turned 19 (her bday is today) -__-
I'm 18.

Sounds like one of the worst things you could possibly do. Nice poem though. Best thing you can do right now is not contact her. It will be hard but she'll come back eventually. You have to make her miss you.