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    these things are just getting dumber it seems...

    yeah - the more i write the dumber they seem to get. Maybe its just me. idk - I wrote these two tonight and wasnt very pleased with them... I actually was going to delete them, but i thought why ? these are feelings of mine and in the future i might want to reflect back upon them - so i decided to keep them.

    But bleh - i will let the critics decide - if you even reply to this unlike all my other poems no one ever responds too... ... ...

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    These have no names for them yet. I am too lazy to think up any names so BLAH





    i feel so weak, so vulnerable, so lost
    to get where i am today, my heart was the cost
    I've gained everything and yet lost so much more
    i lost my home, my family, and the one i adored
    everything in my life has been turned upside down
    and like all things this too had drowned
    i dont miss the murderous one
    not the game, its over, i won
    i dont miss the things i was
    why you may ask - just because ?
    my reasoning is flawless and perfect.
    things change, people change, no stopping it
    we all grow, we all grow wiser and better
    always moving forward and looking back never.
    8-2-04




    sleeping in this cave i wait for the day
    in a deep slumber it seems i've been lost
    awaken from this place of emptiness i never may
    Karma is a bitch and this is my cost
    alone i'm trapped inside full of doubt and fear
    i've lost it all to this world of hate
    i can feel death growing near
    it only seems this could be my fate
    soon is the end, either awaken or grow dead
    find my true love, or become a ghost
    so yet again i think to myself as i lay in bed
    of all the things lost, i miss my mind the most
    8-2-04

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    Not bad at all man, i haven't read many of ur poems... maybe i'll got try hunt some down, but yeah those two are pretty cool, but if you say they ain't your best, I can't argue.... need to read more u see.
    "Its all just your state of mind, doubt is the real killer!"

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    i know how u feel eveyone feels like that sometimes but you just gotta keep living life and one day things will get better

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