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  1. #1
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    Plz rate my valentines poem

    Hi,

    I was terrible at english and have never written a poem out of my own interest but I wrote this poem for my new gf. Still deciding whether to write it on the card with the rose etc. I am hoping you guys can tell me if it is any good or if it can be improved.

    The theme is pretty obvious

    Thanks =D

    take my hand and come with me
    where we are going, i don't need to see
    just take my hand and walk with me.

    As we depart
    i will steal your heart

    though do not fear
    i will keep it near

    you can't get lost, on this trail
    nothing can fail,
    in this tale

    take my hand and come with me
    where we are going i don't need to see
    just take my hand and walk with me.

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    I like it, its simple, to the point and sincere.

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