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    Song # 5 (untitled)

    Yup thats right, its been awhile but I have another song. As most of you are aware, I'm good with poetry and writing in general..but song writing was sometihng new to me, something I wanted to try. Each song seemed to get better as far as lyrics being mature. My 2 most popular seem to be Song #2 (Broken) and my 4th song, which is still untitled.

    Now I just came up with another song, it too is currently untitled. I like this one a lot. The goal was to show the confustion one goes through in trying to de-void a certain part that used to exist but won't go away, the struggle we all go through at least once in our lives. Note: Its very late and im very tired, there are some spelling errors and there is one part I don't think I like much and its the last two lines of Verse 2, I have trouble thinking and it just doesn't flow well or make sense lol. But anyhoo I'm done yapping, here it is..enjoy!
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    [V1]
    Its dark out, and its so cold now
    the bleeding edge of a reality gone blind
    How do I determan what is real and what is not?

    Have you ever looked in the mirror
    and wonder why things happen the way they do,
    I'm so confused, becoming so numb
    How do I get by winters frozen past?

    [C1]
    Damn these epileptic dreams
    they fade in and out
    thrashing the worlds between
    It never ends, and things get blurry.
    I'm breathing heavy, STOP!...
    Wake me so I can believe again.

    [V2]
    It doesn't make sense
    Looking out the window of my life
    I'm paralized to everything you say

    But damnit, I can hear them inside,
    Driving me insane and haunting every step I take.
    I stand and take the blame, its my fault
    So please wake me, or else i'm going to bleed.

    [C2-Final] x2
    Damn these epileptic dreams
    they fade in and out
    thrashing the worlds between
    It never ends, and things get blurry.
    I'm breathing heavy, STOP!...
    Wake me so I can believe again.
    Last edited by Innova; 22-08-04 at 02:32 PM.


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    Awesome Innova. Damn you are deep. And I like the last two lines of V2. I wouldn't change them. With every poem and every word you write I admire you more and more.

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    lol thanks a lot breezy! The more I read, the more I accually like those lines as well, and when I think about it...they do make sense.


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    that was great i like the last two lines. you are talented my friend.

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