You Complete Me

[Ladan]

I couldn't have lived till now
If it wasn't for you
I would have been so lost
Not knowing what to do

You put me together
Only now can I see
You make me what I am
You complete me

We're two different halves
Put together, we're one whole
Every beat of my heart is yours
Everyday I pray for your soul

It's just your smile I need to see
When there's no other remedy
You put me together
You complete me

I'm too scared to let you go
I never want to lose you
If you weren't here with me
I'd never know what to do

All I feel now are joys
All my sorrows are history
What else can I say now?
It's because you complete me.

[anachronistic]

you have a nice rhythmic style. it would go great with a song/instrumental. but it could be better; if you put some more unique imagery in there, it would be more appreciated. not many people would read this because they would think "oh, another sappy love song", just because it's about love! you can avoid this by making things different. if you change some words around there and draw a pretty picture to it (hence imagery) this will be PERFECT

7.5/10

and by the way, use your quote as an example. that is VERY attractive

[Labanon]

Nice poem... wow so romantic.. hehe it can melt da women rights?