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    comments please...

    Some say the world will end in fire,
    Some say in ice.
    From what I've tasted of desire
    I hold with those who favor fire.
    But if it had to perish twice,
    I think I know enough of hate
    To say that for destruction ice
    Is also great
    And would suffice


    Any comments would be great
    Last edited by jelly; 15-06-07 at 03:21 PM.
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    I like that thats really good different but good thanks
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    Thanks for your suggestion...I need more suggestions like you

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    I didn't suggest anything i just said it was good
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    It's better than the average poem that is posted in this forum...
    Relax... I'll need some information first. Just the basic facts - can you show me where it hurts?

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    Quote Originally Posted by vashti View Post
    It's better than the average poem that is posted in this forum...
    yea.

    i thought it was okay for a start.

    a tip for anyone that reads this and writes poetry: don't do forced rhyming. it kills your poem.

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    i thought it was good.

    the rhyme scheme was a little strange, but it was good.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Steve2004 View Post
    i thought it was good.

    the rhyme scheme was a little strange, but it was good.
    I agree. The unusual nature of the rhyme scheme is what made it good. I generally don't care for rhyming poems.
    Relax... I'll need some information first. Just the basic facts - can you show me where it hurts?

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    Huh, that is pretty good. Never realized how well the words desire and fire rhyme and go together.
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    How is it?

    Mixing and matching,
    Twisting and turning,
    Hoping and praying,
    Dreaming and considering,
    Never knowing yet always knowing,
    Wanting to, yet not wanting to,
    Mixing my heart,
    Matching my soul to yours,
    Twisting fate with the flick of the wrist,
    Turning my life over,
    Hoping that it would end,
    Praying that it never would stop,
    Thinking it was over,
    Wishing that it wasn't,
    Dreaming of its coming,
    Considering letting it steal within
    Never knowing if it's true,
    Always knowing that it's there.
    Wanting to live in the light,
    Not wanting the light to come,
    The love of another
    The dreams of someone close,
    Remembering what you used to feel,
    Can it come back if you pray so?
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    that was so cliche.

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    WOW that was REALLY good if only Robert Frost had been around to read your poetry he wouldn't have had to write it himself!!!

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    Thats good
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