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    Unhappy Walks away...

    Would appreciate any feedback you might have... I might actually read this...Wanting her to be happy, but don't want her to get hurt, don't want to hurt her myself, i love her so that i just want her to be happy... is it emphasized enough? I don't feel it expresses what i want to say exactly where it burns in your head.
    Thoughts on what i could do or say or wording? Thanks...



    It pains me so when I see you sad
    It pains me so when I see you mad
    It hurts so much when I see you cry
    It just makes me want to die

    Oceans of thoughts drift through me
    How much I Love You, I truly see
    You are my everything, have no doubt
    But you seeing things for yourself is what it's all about

    I really don't want you to get hurt
    But it's all these thoughts, feelings, and curiosity I understand you must exert
    Thoughts of others doing you wrong pains me so
    But hurt you myself I will not do though

    My Love for you is everlasting
    I want you to know that you can come to me for anything
    If happiness comes from pushing my Love away
    Then I really have nothing else to say...

    But...I Love You...

    *walks away*
    Last edited by Chase; 20-03-04 at 04:18 AM.

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    what are you trying to say?
    "Don't be afraid to fail because only through failure do you
    learn to succeed." "Oh and be careful what you do...you'll never know who's watching..."

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    Good poem man.

    He's trying to say how much he has love for this women, but in the end must walk away for he does not want to end up hurting her or otherwise something similar.


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