Ten Fold

[confused_guy_b]

Since I have been young I have been searching for a girl like you.
Nothing in life is free and everything takes effort.
There is nothing better in the hat of life I could have drew.

You make my life complete, you make me great.
I hope everyone feels what I am feeling now in the comfort of your arms.
Dreaming of a romantic ending with you dissolves within me a massive weight.

I know we are good for each other, I know this is our best.
There is no one else in world I would rather spend my time with.
Taking a gaze at the stars I surely know we have been blessed.

This was ment to be, this came straight from the depths of our souls.
No other woman matters to me, no woman can do what you do for me.
When it comes to you I would walk the earth, I know my roles.

Eternal love is what I offer, I am proud of you to accept.
We have been through many situations, we never can give up.
This is the easy part in our lives I promise to keep you swept.

Growing within me is a globe of feelings that accumulate and sweat.
You make me a better person, everyone around us will feel the effect.
Placing my love with you is like taking a sure bet.

Age ripens our lives and being with you is better then gold.
There is nothing else for us to seek in this world, we have found the one.
Being with you everyday, holding your hand truly increases our love ten fold.


Tell me what you think! Let me know if it could use some work or it's spot on. Many people believe I have talent but I am overly critical of myself.

Thanks! ~Brian~

PS: She broke up with me. ><

[confused_guy_b]

I guess people only comment to the bad ones? lol

[confused_guy_b]

Screw this useless forum. You people blow monkey ass.

[gartlas]

We only comment the bad ones....Not really. But your egotism annoys me. In relation to your poem...mediocre...being generous. I would have sugar coated it had you not been up your ass

[confused_guy_b]

Yeah, this isn't my only post and I received little help with the previous ones as well. Gets a little tiring helping people out and getting no responses to the topics I have posted. No one wanted you to sugar coat it anyways. If I were asking for lies I would have asked my family. Egotistical? I stated at the end of the poem that I am hard on myself. Would someone with a huge ego say that?