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    My first ever song: Lyrics inside

    A while ago, I told you all I was writing a song, or in ways trying to. I wanted ot expand my writing abilitys. I found this to be harder then I thought. Musical writing is very difficult, those two "examples" I showed never made it and both songs failed. It wasn't till I realised something the other night, that just like deep poetry, you had to feel a flow, combine it will emotion and you have a song.

    I've spent the last 30 mins writing this song, so yes this is very fresh. It was bore'd from something Breezy told me with a combination of her "Dream" poem she recently wrote. So without further ado, I give you my very first and "complete" song lyrics. I call this song "Tears of Pain".

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    [v1.]
    Remember, Remember when you said that you loved me
    How could I forget, you said you'd never leave me
    But now I seem to ask if it was all just a dream.

    Sometimes, things just get too difficult to understand
    I know, I said I'd be there for you
    But it got too hard, and now I'm falling for what seems like forever

    [Chorus]
    And so I cry, I can't seem to wake from this nightmare
    The ever casting darkness that clouds my eyes.
    And Every night I see, a haunting image of you and me
    But I can't seem to forget you, this love I can't erase.
    I beg for you to come back home..
    Because I'm stuck with these tears of pain.

    [v2]
    One year later, I'm still staring into night sky
    Still wishing on dead hopes and dreams
    Remembering times when I said "That it would be alright"
    Now my mind is torn between dreams and reality.
    Yet somehow, something keeps me here waiting for you..

    [chorus]
    And so I cry, I can't seem to wake from this nightmare
    The ever casting darkness that clouds my eyes.
    And Every night I see, a haunting image of you and me
    But I can't seem to forget you, this love I can't erase.
    I beg for you to come back home..
    Because I'm stuck with these tears of pain.

    [v3-rush]
    So you changed, what about our words spoken
    Turned into dust and broken promises
    A piece of you remains and it hurts to know
    We both still hold on to something deep inside
    The fire burning, trying to stay alive
    I gave my heart and life to you, and I'm still standing
    Here, waiting for you...

    [F-Chorus]
    And so I cry, I can't seem to wake from this nightmare
    The ever casting darkness that clouds my eyes.
    And Every night I see, a haunting image of you and me
    But I can't seem to forget you, this love I can't erase.
    I beg for you to come back home..
    Because I'm stuck with these tears of pain...

    These tears of...pain.

    [Fade]
    [End]
    Last edited by Innova; 30-05-04 at 11:23 AM.


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    Innova I wondered how long it would be before you did this-and sweetie you have me in tears...
    everything happens for a reason...beginning to wonder why.

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    ditto. Wow. I can't even think of words to explain the emotion you've created Innova. It's brilliant. I wish I could hear it with music, even though it has me in tears. Good writing.

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    Thank you all very much, it was difficult to write...but I gave my all. Hopefully I can put these to use and make real music with it.


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    Im sure it was difficult for you-but you know its therapy and it helps you through it. I hope somewhere in this you'll be able to find Innova and find true love again! I wish the very best for you.
    everything happens for a reason...beginning to wonder why.

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    I second that Squirrley. Innova is just too sweet to be alone for long. One day a lucky girl is gonna discover what a great guy he is and he'll be writing love sonnets for her. *sigh* In the meantime your talent is increasing with everything you write. Keep it up. One day I expect to hear your name on the radio or television.

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    well innova, i make beats- im not amazing or anything but, if you needed me to- i could make something for you, id enjoy the challenge- but youd hafto give me the general feel of what you were going for with the musical aspect.. but honestly only thing im really confident in productionwise is my drums. get back to me though id love to give it a shot even if you wouldnt end up using whatever i came up with
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